So just over two years ago I did a line revision of Love and Loyalty because when I looked at it I saw where I could strengthen the flow of the sentences. As I delved into it I also saw a new plot element — that I would have seen the first time had I not been too slavish in following my outline — that I think greatly improved the novel.

So with fresh new edits and abetter writing I sent it off to a publisher. Well, if you follow this blog you now it got bounced recently.

This week I read it out loud for my writers group and boy did I hear trouble in the sentence structure. (Not grammar, but the sentences just did not flow.)

So that prompted my committing myself to a new round of sentence level revisions. (And the feedback I got at the reading was very helpful.)

I have such mixed feelings about this.

On one hand I was totally blind to the fault of the manuscript when I shipped it off in 2009.

On the other hand I can clearly see the fault so I must be improving, right?

Happy or sad, I just don’t know.