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Treacherous Seas

In less than a month my debut novel Vulcan’s Forge will be released upon an unsuspecting world. My editor at Flame Tree has expressed the hopes in the future that we shall be working together on many novels. I have found everyone at Flame Tree to be wonderful, supportive, and utterly professional and welcoming so the idea of working with them on more books is very enticing.

Some years ago, I completed a military SF novel that landed me with a literary agency. While the association with the agency didn’t work out and we went our separate ways, that novel has sparked at least some interest with a couple of publishing houses.

The trouble is timing.

Two other editors are looking at the book, one because we met a conference and they read a few sample pages and the other because I had submitted the manuscript through the imprint’s slush pile. (Slush pile is the name for the great stack of manuscript that are sent to a publisher un-agented.) Both publishers have had the book for over a year now. In that interim I sold, edited, and next both will have published Vulcan’s Forge with Flame tree.

I have decided that I am going to go ahead and send my military SF book over to Flame Tree. I will let the other editors know what the score is but I can’t even be sure that my emails are being read. These are turbulent seas to navigate and the sort where having an agent would be extremely helpful but I have no agent and must sail these waters myself.

I am taking some time to revise the manuscript before sending it over the Flame Tree. When I submitted to that agency I was signed with it was 115,000 words long, not overly long for an SF novel, but the reader and co—owner of the agency had required that I cut it down before he recommended it to his agents and so I brought it down to 98,000 words. I did this by trimming the opening battle but I was never truly happy with that. The massive battle that opens the book is meant to have the scale, weight, and importance of something along the lines of WWII’s battle of Midway and the lighter version I felt didn’t quite get that across. So, I am going back to the 115,000 words manuscript, making minor adjustments and that will by the new version.

Wish me luck.

 

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My Long Weekend

This past weekend was a very satisfying one for me. Thursday, I traveled to Disneyland and hung out with a friend I have not seen for a few years. The original plan was to be with two pals but financial issue at the last moment grounded one of my friends. We hung about in Galaxy’s Edge, though we did not get a boarding Pass that would have allowed us onto the newest attracting, explored other areas of the park, and had a smashing good time getting caught up on each other’s lives. After about 7 hours of walking my knees sent their vehement protests and we called it day so I could drive home to San Diego.

Friday through Saturday I spent at the 34th annual Southern California Writers Conference. This is the third time I have attended the particular conference and it is small intimate gathering of writers and agents to share the craft. There were many good seminars and workshops during the daylight hours and in the evening I participated in read and critique sessions giving my meager opinion on some fantastic writing. I got valuable feedback on a work in progress of mine and all in all had a great time with friends and expanded my skill set.

The Conference continued into Sunday, but I skipped out on the last day not because it had suddenly turned dull but because I wanted to spend my Sunday in my traditional manner, with my sweetie-wife. We did not go to the zoo, perhaps just as well as I feel I may have pushed my knees a bit far, had a lovely lunch at one of our favorite spots, and generally enjoyed each other’s company.

Here’s hoping your weekend was similarly enjoyable.

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Naming My Characters

Coming up with names for characters in my short stories and novel has always been a challenge. There’s the desire to avoid names with feel too ‘common’ and lack their own sense of character, the Bobs and so forth, but going too far afield into actual names that are exceptionally rare feels false. This is a    hurdle I have to overcome with every piece of fiction, no matter how long or how brief and can be magnified if the character in question is an alien because before I can name the character I have to devise a naming system for his culture because after all individual name plus family name isn’t even universal among humans.

For my novel being published next month I managed to make this difficult task even harder.

The set-up in the novel is that when the Earth is threatened with destruction by a rouge brown dwarf passing through the inner solar system humanity launches hundreds if not thousands of automated arks loaded with self-replicating machines, artificial wombs, and banks of sperm and egg to establish new human colonies. Some of these arks were programmed with very specific goals of persevering certain cultures, nationalities, and religion and so forth, some were designed to have a greater degree of freedom in the care of the generations of humans that were to follow.

For the colony of Nocturnia where the novel takes place the demographic percentages of the later 21st century America were used to create the racial make-up of the colony and the names were taken from the U.S. Census but in drafting the outline and creating the character I faced a decision that swung me back and forth for quite some time.

Should the character names be tied to their character’s ethnicity?

These characters had never in any sense at all be a product of the cultures that their names derived from for all intents and purposes they were faux-Americans. With their ark’s designers fixated on an idealized American culture that never truly existed would that have programmed the artificial intelligences to force names to match ethnic background or simply have left the assignment of names to the A.I. own randomness?

I liked the idea that the names were randomly assigned but I was concerned that the readers might be lost of confused. I wanted to avoid leaning too heavily on reminding the reader just what each character’s ethnic heritage was and if I kept the names tied to their heritage I could side-step the challenge. But once I hit on the idea of the randomness of the names I really really liked it.

In the end I went the character names that do not map to their racial appearance. Now with the book coming out next month and should reviews and feedback come back my direction I will learn if I met the challenge or faceplanted.

 

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Movies Better Than Their Books

It’s a sentiment accepted by many a bibliophile that the novel is always better than the film version, but I content such a broad and all-encompassing statement cannot be universally true. Here are a few examples of where I think the films version of the stories exceeded what the novel presented.

Jaws

The iconic terrifying film from Steven Spielberg sent a generation scrambling for the shore fearful of the water is based upon a novel by Peter Benchley. For the screenplay two major sub-plots were omitted, the affair between Chief Brody’s wife and the young expert Hooper and Amity’s Mayor’s debt to local organized crime that made the mayor fearful of closing the beaches and being unable to repay what he owed. Both sub-plots are melodramatic and easily the most forgettable aspects of the novel. While Hooper’s and Ellen’s affair makes both of these characters less sympathetic than the cinematic characters.

The Hunt for Red October

Tom Clancy’s first novel of a Soviet super-sub’s defection to the west produced a terrific film directed by John McTernan and gave us the best on-screen Jack Ryan with Alec Baldwin. The novel suffered from American Uber Alles with everything done by the U.S. Military being exemplary over the far less capable Soviet forces. Reducing this produced a tighter and more tense conflict.

The Prestige

Not as well-know or as beloved as many other films by Christopher Nolan The Prestige took the great liberties with its source material a prize-winning fantasy novel of the same name by Christopher Priest. The novel spans time between the modern day, 1995 for the publication date, and the later 1800 with the feud between the rival stage magicians, introducing concepts as far afield as ghost into its narrative. Nolan’s script simplified the scope, restricting to its time setting, but retaining the multiple points of view and non-linear narrative but most importantly his gave a better motivation for why the feus turned murderous. In the novel it spirals out from one character performing seances, a common practice for stage magician’s, and being exposed for his fraud by his rival, also a common activity for stage magicians of the period. Having an on-stage death for which one is responsible made for a more compelling and acceptable motivation for the feud’s terrible escalation.

 

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Thoughts About Prologs

One of the most common pieces of advice  you’re likely to hear at seminars, workshops, conventions, and writing groups is that publishers and agents do not want to see prologs. This is a true statement that is often countered by pointing to numerous books that currently sit on shelves with prologs. Of course, as a counter example that is not a very good argument because it suffers from survivor bias, the only books that sit on booksellers’ shelving are the book that were published a tiny fraction of the novel written and a tiny fraction of those submitted for consideration to agents and publishers.

Why is there such an often-repeated suggestion to omit your prolog? It is because far too many prologs are nothing more than either world building or backstory establishment where authors fearful that the readers will be lost create to explain the opening situation and there in a single word is why these prologs are weak openings, ‘explain.’

When you start your novel you have a very limited window to grab the reader’s attention and starting out with an explanation tends to lack dramatic tension. Agents and editors, people with little time and a very tall stack of things to read will smell an obvious explanation focused opening and from that deduce that the writer is unlikely to handle the rest of the story well and stop reading. Casual readers may give you more space but aside from self-publishing you must first survived the fires of the agents and editors to reach that larger audience.

I have a novel coming out next month, Vulcan’s Forge and to much amusement from members of my writers’ group it has a prolog. However, when I first wrote the novel it did not. After the first round of beta readers one of the more common comments centered of confusion about events that had happened prior to the start of the story. Because Vulcan’s Forge is written in a first-person point of view, I had two options to fix the issue. I could have characters that were there tell the point of view character what happened much like how a detective in some novels will gather everyone together for the resolution of the mystery, or I could show the events in a prolog. Clearly, I went with the prolog and clearly it did not cause my editor to bounce the manuscript, but I think there were a couple of factors that helped my novel survive the issue around having a prolog.

To start with the prolog is presented in third person. This cleanly breaks it away from the rest of the novel setting the tone that there is much that the main character is unaware of and that presents a danger to him. Next the prolog itself is a scene of dramatic tension with a viewpoint character that faces a tribulation and suffers its resolution. The vital information that my beta readers felt was missing is presented in the context of characters in conflict and not direct exposition. And finally, the prolog ends with a dramatic hook that leads directly into the opening scene of the novel so that the reader but not the character is aware of the importance of the story opening sequence.

Prologs can work but you must understand the purpose of your prolog and you must always wrap it in dramatic narrative if it is to be seen as essential to your piece.

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The Trouble with Screenplay Credits

If you watch movie made in the united states you know that right before the Director’s Credit, contractually the final credit displayed before the film plays, you will see the credit for the writer of the screenplay. You may see a single person credited, or several. If there’s an ampersand between two names it means those people are a team and if there’s an and it means one person wrote and then the other came along and also wrote but they did not work together. This is all well and good but in the end it seems like it’s not really the whole truth of the matter.

The writer is employed at the whim and dictates of the producer and in the film that has such a large impact that it makes it very difficult for anyone outside of the process that made that particular film to know just what elements of the screenplay are the result of the writer and which are elements that were forced into the work by some other agency. The writer may be against have a giant mutant worm sexually assault a female character but if the producer insists on the scene then it will be written and shot and for the rest of time the writer will be the one carrying the credit and the blame for the exploitive sequence. The director may be a hired gun for the production with little interest in the material who throws out the final act and writes his own ending, but it will be the credited screenwriters who are blamed for ripping off Aliens for their script.

When you watch a movie it can be nearly impossible to know who is actually responsible for both the great and terrible elements of the story and that’s a problem in my book. I wish I had some solution, but I don’t. The truth of the matter is that the final product is what it is and the credits may give you a clue as to how it came to be and its potential quality but only a clue.

 

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The Pain of Self-Rejecting

Recently I was invited to participate in an anthology and I submitted a short horror story. The editor returned with notes and suggestions for changes to the story but like its dark cruel ending.

Sadly, the changes felt ‘a bridge too far’ for my vision of the story and what it needed to achieve my goals. So, I have withdrawn the story from consideration for the anthology.

This is the first time I have run aground on this particular shoal in the treacherous sea of publishing. It’s not the editor’s fault, they are not wrong because as the person putting together the anthology  it must reflect their taste and their vision for what works in speculative fiction. I am not wrong. I have a very clear idea and vision for how this story and how horror stories work to me. It is simply a conflict of different artistic takes and vision.

I am not naming the anthology or the editor. This isn’t about complaining, whining, or bitching but a recognition that sometimes things simply can’t be made to work out for all parties involved.

I wish them the best and now the story will sail off into the storm of submission once more.

 

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Well, That Was a Day Lost

Yesterday I awoke to a blinding migraine. I hate it when they sneak up on me while I am sleeping. If I am awake I can usually feel the pre-migraine show starting up take my meds and keep them from become more than simply troublesome, but if they strike in the night I wake to find that any amount of light and noise is intolerable and I am forced to use the heavier medication that leaves me groggy, dizzy, and useless for nearly everything for a significant number of hours.

It wasn’t until about 2 pm that I became useful in any capacity and it wasn’t until around 9:30 pm that the migraine itself lifted.

Needless to say I did not go to work and I did not get any writing completed.

It could have been worse. Today looks to be better.

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First Author Event

The release of my first published novel Vulcan’s Forge is just two months away and with it comes my first in person event as an author, a book signing on March 28th at Mysterious Galaxy.

I admit that even two months out I am nervous.

Now, I am not one of those people who have a terrible fear about public speaking. I have been on a number of panels at science-fiction conventions, made presentations at my day job, excelled at my speech class, and even performed in a play before a paying audience, but I am also nervous and unsure about things I have never done before. I am looking forward to the event and I am planning on more in the southwest region to help promote the book.

What should I do at the event is one of those questions I haven’t yet answered.

I have been to a number of author events and I’ve seen it handled in one of three basic ways.

  • Read from the work being promoted. This is good for hopefully generating interest in the work and moving units.
  • Make a speech/presentation. There are very successful authors out there who do not read from their work but rather use the time to talk about the process, the world, and what the writing means to them.
  • Read from some other work. This can be used as sort of like a Blu-ray bonus material. The people who go the events get peeks at short stories or novel in progress that people who buy the book will never have,

All three of these approaches have advantages and disadvantages. I think I could do any of them fairly well. I am just going to have to decide and which one.

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Brief Comments on the Passing of Mike Resnick

Mike Resnick noted science fiction author and mentor to many up and coming writers has died. He did not disclose publicly that severity of his condition and there are a great many in the field that will miss him.

I never had the fortune to have personal interaction with Mike other than a few passing online comments and an ‘almost there’ rejection letter. (He said he was onboard for the story until the last two pages.)

Many of my writing friends have had close communication and guidance from Mike and all had nothing but good things to say about the man, as a writer, as a teacher, and as a human being. That’s a damned fine eulogy right there.

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